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Challenge #196 - Loss - dreaming_k
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Challenge #196 - Loss
Title: Surprise
Author: Dreaming K
Category: Slash (Jim/Blair)
Rating: PG at best
Disclaimer: I don't own The Sentinel or any of the characters. Just dreaming :)
Summary: Short, sweet drabble?

My first try at a real drabble. My admiration for all authors who manage to give 100 short words actual, deep meaning is boundless.
Be honest, this is senselessly stupid, isn't it?


Surprise

I didn’t notice Jim striding into Major Crimes on the stroke of five, bee-lining for our desk. He did, however, draw my absolute attention when he leaned over the desk, smiled, cupped my stubbly cheek and caressed my surprised lips with his own in a chaste but loving kiss.

A soft, warm touch.

Whistling cheerfully Jim walked out of the bull pen again, smugness and heartfelt satisfaction radiating from his very being.

I stared after him, my fingers coming up to delicately trace my kiss-blessed lips, at a total loss for words.

Then I grinned and raced after my Jim.

Tags:
Current Location: my desk
Current Mood: silly silly

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Comments
snycock From: snycock Date: June 14th, 2007 09:18 pm (UTC) (Link)
Oh, no, it's very lovely! And kudos for doing it in 100 words...*g*
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 14th, 2007 09:23 pm (UTC) (Link)
Hah! Thanks so much, you make me feel very accomplished.
You would tell me if there were any mistakes in there, wouldn't you?
snycock From: snycock Date: June 15th, 2007 04:06 am (UTC) (Link)
Oh, of course...I didn't see any, though...
snailbones From: snailbones Date: June 14th, 2007 09:28 pm (UTC) (Link)
That's so very warm and sweet... thanks for sharing :~)
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 14th, 2007 09:32 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thanks for commenting! ;)
I love writing warm fuzzies, and it's great to know people like reading them.
miwahni From: miwahni Date: June 14th, 2007 09:44 pm (UTC) (Link)
That's so sweet! And bringing it in dead on 100 words is quite a challenge.
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 14th, 2007 09:50 pm (UTC) (Link)
Thank you!
It actually took me the better part of two hours to write these 100 words. *shakes head* I'm glad you like it. :)
t_verano From: t_verano Date: June 15th, 2007 09:39 am (UTC) (Link)
No, no, please don't shake your head at taking two hours to write 100 words. I can't seem to write one in less than two *days,* seriously, even when it the drabble isn't fighting me or anything. Two hours would be *so* nice... But I think it just takes as long as it takes, and finding the 100 words that you actually want to use -- the joy of drabbling -- can take time. (Not like I have vast experience to be talking about this or anything. Heh. Just a love for drabbles...)
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 15th, 2007 02:42 pm (UTC) (Link)
Yes, there are so many words to choose from, and I think that finding just the right ones is fun. I do find it difficult to stop at 100 words and let them speak for themselves, though. :)
sidlj From: sidlj Date: June 14th, 2007 09:46 pm (UTC) (Link)
my Jim

Squeee! :-)

You done good!
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 14th, 2007 09:51 pm (UTC) (Link)
*g* Thanks, it's great to know that you like it.
justjeanette From: justjeanette Date: June 14th, 2007 10:33 pm (UTC) (Link)

Very NIce.

It's nice to see a sweet answer to the Loss challenge.

MInd you I don't think Blair will be lost for words for too long... though his mouth may be engaged in other endeavors...

JJ
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 15th, 2007 07:36 am (UTC) (Link)

Re: Very NIce.

It's why I wrote it. :)
Actually, Jim did pretty good to make him speechless in the first place. But then Blair always recovers fast...
Thanks for commenting!
polly_b From: polly_b Date: June 14th, 2007 10:44 pm (UTC) (Link)
A good drabble draws a clear mental picture with those 100 words. You wrote a good drabble. Go you!
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 15th, 2007 07:38 am (UTC) (Link)
Wow, now I feel better about the little thing.
Thank you for commenting!
janedavitt From: janedavitt Date: June 14th, 2007 11:34 pm (UTC) (Link)
I love drabbles and this was a great one; 100 words (vital :-)) with a nice glimpse of a sweet moment and a good use of the prompt; looks just fine from where I'm reading!
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 15th, 2007 07:39 am (UTC) (Link)
It was hard to stop at 100 words and not just write more. :)
Thank you!
betagoddess From: betagoddess Date: June 15th, 2007 02:20 am (UTC) (Link)
Very nicely done. *g*
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 15th, 2007 07:40 am (UTC) (Link)
Thank you very much for your comment!
t_verano From: t_verano Date: June 15th, 2007 09:30 am (UTC) (Link)
Really like the image of Jim walking out of the bullpen radiating "smugness and heartfelt satisfaction" and Blair staring after him with his fingers tracing his lips before he races off after "his Jim."

Sweet and lovely. (And drabbles are so cool; they can do so many things -- hope you keep writing them!)
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 15th, 2007 02:36 pm (UTC) (Link)
I love smug Jim and speechless Blair because you don't see them very often. :)
After the great reception of my first drabble in this comm I'll definitely keep writing them. They are fun!
turps33 From: turps33 Date: June 15th, 2007 02:20 pm (UTC) (Link)
I can just see Jim's smug expression *g*

You used the prompt so well, and I'm with the commenter above. It's good to see a happy response.

Go you!
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 15th, 2007 02:49 pm (UTC) (Link)
A lovely image, isn't it? *grins*
Thank you, I'm glad you like it.
thismaz From: thismaz Date: June 19th, 2007 09:24 am (UTC) (Link)
Ahh, now I liked that. Very much.
100 words to perfectly capture a moment and an event. Nice use of the prompt, too.
dreaming_k From: dreaming_k Date: June 19th, 2007 10:37 am (UTC) (Link)
Heh. Thanks so much for your comment and for telling me you like it. :)
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